tag of the day: perd (for "peer edit rough draft")
Connect, cut, and reconnect words, sound, images, and ideas.
tab this tabla
and listen as you read and remember
Select any paragraph from the peer draft you are reading. As you read focus your attention on the voice of the language. Do you find active configurations? Or passive constructions? This week, when we review each others' drafts, we have to be free to critique and open to suggestions. Identifying shifts in voice--from active to passive, and back again--can help you begin a conversation about the effectiveness of a peer's writing. If you find a paragraph in a peer's draft that "just doesn't seem right," read it aloud. Does the voice seem to shift randomly from active to passive voice, or does the writer seem to use voice to shift emphasis and direct your attention in order to amplify a particular argumentative pattern or point?
Perform this algorithm on your most recently composed paragraph in your definition, or on a portion of your narrative, or peer narratives and blogs. Then, read the results aloud. Finally, shift your attention to the paragraph's specific purpose, imagine it in a larger argument or final project. Revise back into the passive voice when it helps emphasize your paragraph's overall rhetorical purpose.
Now, look for transitions...will your readers see your sequence of ideas?
Roshi7 Peer Review:
Daniel Miller Roshi7 Week 5 edit
The problem with sustain-ability
roshi7 Schan country definition peer edit