Savannah

To be this knowledgeable on a subject such as this one really impresses me. As I read it, I was constantly agreeing, learning, and staying interested. You obviously put a lot of though, time and effort in to this paper. There was a lot of information, so you must have done tons of research. This must be a very important topic to you, as you clearly showed. All of your arguments were abundant with support, and there were so many informative examples. This was a really well written paper. Good job.

Kristen

This essay was definitely written by some who has a tattoo. It is a very interesting topic. You need to elaborate more on it though! I want to read more about the African tribes tattooing their faces and how this art was practiced since the ancient egyptians. It is a great start to the essay, just keep it up.

Becky Newman

This is a very important topic you chose to write about. Women face so many pressures that tell them how to be, act, and look. You took an approach to ask you readers how people are supposed to look at their role models when all they are saying is how they should be so thin. So many young girls are growing up with this mentality that they need to look like this. You put a lot of thought in work in to your paper, and it showed. There was a lot of support for your arguments, and plenty of information on the dangers of unhealthy dieting.