COMMENTARY

Yo B-dizzle. Ok, so reading you're essay definitly enlightened me. I wasn't too aware about the whole concept of biodiversity. I only just assumed from the name. Go through and read your essay a second time and definitly listen to what Spencer has written, he made some good grammatical points. There were just times where the word choice was a little off or a few minor errors here and there. Also, you should try doing what I do. I don't exactly have a very eloborate vocabulary so when I write something that feels like it's a little "Plain Jane" I just use that little synonyms button and it does me wonders. Just so it spices up the paper a little bit more. A great example of biodiversity in a tropical environment can be found in the Galapagos Islands, where Charles Darwin developed his theories of natural selection explaining evolution. The Galapagos Island, are arguably the host of the most diverse forms of life in the world. This may be because the Galapagos Islands also hold host to the second largest marine conservational environment in the world; spanning nearly forty-four thousand square miles. On a set of islands that cover only four thousand and forty-three square miles, the Galapagos Islands lay home to over thirteen hundred separate species. A little over six hundred being animals and over seven hundred being plants on the land, not including marine life. These numbers do nothing but continue to grow. I like how you threw in a good real life example to expand and try to put it into perspective. A little history lesson now and then is always good. Don't be afraid to throw in a little somthing extra though when you write, even maybe a little bit of "smart ass ism" (yes I swear it's a word I used my good old synonyms button haha) people always love that and it keeps them intrigued in your writing. Soliddddddddddd.