Jocelyn I graded your paper as if each section was worth 25 points, below each one are the points you received
Rhetorical Knowledge Critical Thinking, Writing and reading Process Knowledge of Conventions GRAND TOTAL:
24 20 25 25 94/ 100
Rhetorical Knowledge (24/25):
I really admire the fact that your so passionate about your subject of going vegan. Your purpose was very clear, to explain how agriculture is degrading our environment. Your tone was strong as well. I would like to have seen you mention how the process of being vegan was sustainable, like how vegan lifestyle is indefinite.
Critical Thinking Writing and Reading(20/25):
People def. could learn a few things from your paper. I liked that you used statistics, but how am i to know that you didn't just pull them out of no where is there not CITED. I LOVED how you used the power of words to get your voice across, that also told me how much you cared about helping earth.
Process (25/25):
I'm very glad to know im not the only one who did all the assignments for the writing process. I liked how your rough draft was choppy, that you just needed to organize your ideas, i think it's so much easier to organize that way. You participated in the peer edits as well so you "critiqued" your work as well as others. you hit the nail on the head with this section girl!
Knowledge of conventions (25/25):
It was refreshing to read your paper. i was so glad i didn't see many contractions!!! Spelling and grammer were great!
****I would like to add that im very passionate about agriculture so i kept and open mind while reading your paper. It's ashame that some farmers and ranchers don't know better practices to sustain their farming and they ruin it for the ones that do. Also farmers and ranchers that abuse the land don't make much of a profit and it comes back to bite them in the ass, sucessful farmers and ranchers know that they must nurture the land in order to make a profit. I do agree with you that some practices are harmful and need to be regulated, but not all farmers and ranchers are harming earth my family runs are very eco-friendly agriculture operation. =] I just wanted to give you some of my personal feedback. But i thought your information was very insightful as well!!
- Savannah
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